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The main building was inspected on October 1. Mr. George Wills inspected the building. Mr. Wills is vice president of the company. He found that the building has 6,500 square feet of floor space. He also found that it has 2,400 square feet of storage space. The new store must have a minimum of 6,000 square feet of floor space. It must have 2,000 square feet of storage space. Thus, the main building exceeds the space requirements for the new store. Therefore, Mr. Wills concluded that the main building is adequate for the company's needs.
Our corrected paragraph:
The main building was inspected on October 1 by Mr. George Wills, vice president of the company. He found that the building has 6,500 square feet of floor space and 2,400 square feet of storage space. The new store must have a minimum of 6,000 square feet of floor space and 2,000 square feet of storage space. Since the main building exceeds the space requirements for the new store, Mr. Wills concluded that it is adequate for the company's needs.